She was like a mermaid
I m afraid :(
My heart, I mislaid..
I lost everythin in the raid!
I m afraid :(
My heart, I mislaid..
I lost everythin in the raid!
All my life I'll b a mope,
I drink, I smoke, I dope.
I dun think there's any hope!
This pain I couldn cope :(
Is der someone for me to console?
Der goes my soul....
Depression, DEPression ,DEPRESSION , on the floor I roll,
I feel nothin in my body but a Big Hole!
15 comments:
superb one da.. really awesome.. keep goin.. make sure ur gal reads all this..
Yo Bro,
I'm neither a poet nor a good adviser, but I see the pain in you and I doubt if anyone else can see deeper as me.
Cigarette,Whiskey or Grass may make you feel good now, but trust me when days pass by n you look back, I bet' you would say , "Oh shit, what the fuck I've done!".
I know it feels like hollow inside you, but guess what? you have a choice to build it stronger. Strong enough to forgive yourself, strong enough to forgive anyone, strong enough to forget if needed and strong enough to lead the life jus like any other day.
I wish we were kids, remember when eva we fell down, we hardly bothered, tapping the dust off and getting back to the game no matter whether we win or loose... I don think we are from our kids days, are we?
Though I'm not close to you, I'm still watching you eagerly, cuz I know you're strong enough to stand up and make the right choice but the question is "How Soon you'll do it"?
Poem is good. I mean, only the poem and its content.
But, I dont like the reason for which you wrote this. Basically, I don't like people getting depressed. Everyone should always be happy.
Good one machi..
a small suggestion.. think more on positive themes.. Try to write something with positive mood.. Ur writing was good.. but the energy was negative [in d las 2 posts]..
i understand tat poems r written when one's hurt.. but strive to extract d positive out of it n present it to us..
this is my humble view..
over-a nakkitteno.. [:P]
Dai.. next time u rite a poem on DEPRESSION... dont ask me to read it in the morning.. pl give a warning abt it.. so tat i will not read it in the morning :)...
Except 4 tat.. ev thing else is nice... but depression itself is worth less... tat too 4 a gal... any ways.. my tots wid me...
All the best the next one... Keep "rocking" ;-)
Its good machi but that big is disturbing me. i am not ok with that big hole :). hmmm good one .
will this poem come in SSLC English syllabus ?
Hope this poem releases ur depression..
I see your feelings in this..
Hope that girl ll also feel..
Good one da..
Enjoyed it..
A goood effort indeed!!(poem)
Don worry try for another one!!(gal)
tat was a good one... but as others say, try putting ur words in a positive manner rather than lamenting abt something or someone and let ur verse bring out enthu to all... U rock!!!!! :)
Sucha,Love alone is not life.I also feel that Life can't exists without love,so take it easy and look forward
This one is good da
good poem .. i removed earlier comment .. after reading ur disclaimer down there ... :) keep going.
good one!!!! i did not know u right poems.... keep it up.
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